Hi today I will be writing a short story for you also known as a quick write.
We are given the sentence starter and we have to carry it on.
Particles of dust drifted...
through the air. I thought that this moment was priceless but it was not. The light filtered through the cold iron bars. The air was crisp and cold. On the concrete wall there was graffiti. It told me to turn around so I put my hand in my pocket ad slowly turned around and there he was. As if he turned up out of thin air. He was standing right there my dad but he was not quite alive he was pale and lifeless all he said was "run", but I could not run. My feet were stuck. I was petrified but I needed to ask my dad so many questions like where he had been and who killed him and why he left that night but then he burst into the room the person who killed him. thinking quickly I puled out my pocket knife and held it to his throat. The next thing I know wake up it is time for school it was all a dream but it just felt to real.
I hope you liked my quick write please comment on my blog post if you have any feedback or feedforward.
Thanks for reading!
Particles of dust drifted...
through the air. I thought that this moment was priceless but it was not. The light filtered through the cold iron bars. The air was crisp and cold. On the concrete wall there was graffiti. It told me to turn around so I put my hand in my pocket ad slowly turned around and there he was. As if he turned up out of thin air. He was standing right there my dad but he was not quite alive he was pale and lifeless all he said was "run", but I could not run. My feet were stuck. I was petrified but I needed to ask my dad so many questions like where he had been and who killed him and why he left that night but then he burst into the room the person who killed him. thinking quickly I puled out my pocket knife and held it to his throat. The next thing I know wake up it is time for school it was all a dream but it just felt to real.
I hope you liked my quick write please comment on my blog post if you have any feedback or feedforward.
Thanks for reading!
Hi Carys!
ReplyDeleteWow I love your story! It's very dark and I love how you added so much detail! Just remember to check your punctuation next time. Keep up the good work!